Post by mrcaldicott on Apr 22, 2014 9:23:12 GMT
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Timed Essay feedback- Ed Rita
13 passes, 11 fails
Good things:
• Technical accuracy (spelling, punctuation, grammar) was acceptable in the majority of essays, extremely good in one or two.
• The vast majority of you got to the point quickly (the breakdown) – in most cases this led to a pass.
• The content of most essays was relevant to the question.
Things to improve:
• Use of contractions (don’t, can’t etc.) 18
• Not enough quoting 10
• Writing in pencil instead of pen 9
• Name of text not in inverted commas 8
• Misquoting 8
• Not writing the question no.(important!) 4
• Writing ‘women’ instead of ‘woman’ 4
Specifics to question 1:
Not enough of you have a detailed knowledge of Act 2 Scene 5, where F & R have their biggest conflict of the play.
Several think that F calls R ‘Mary Shelley’ – it’s himself he calls this (otherwise it doesn’t make sense – think about it!)
A massively useful quote to indicate breakdown:
‘Found a better song to sing have you? No - you’ve found a different song, that’s all - and on your lips it’s shrill and hollow and tuneless.’
But most of you didn’t use it.
Go through Act 2 of the play and your notes on Act 2, and practice writing out accurate key quotes to show a change in F & R’s relationship (use Look, Cover, Write, Check). Then write as much detailed analysis as you can, explaining how Russell shows the change effectively.
Timed Essay feedback- Ed Rita
13 passes, 11 fails
Good things:
• Technical accuracy (spelling, punctuation, grammar) was acceptable in the majority of essays, extremely good in one or two.
• The vast majority of you got to the point quickly (the breakdown) – in most cases this led to a pass.
• The content of most essays was relevant to the question.
Things to improve:
• Use of contractions (don’t, can’t etc.) 18
• Not enough quoting 10
• Writing in pencil instead of pen 9
• Name of text not in inverted commas 8
• Misquoting 8
• Not writing the question no.(important!) 4
• Writing ‘women’ instead of ‘woman’ 4
Specifics to question 1:
Not enough of you have a detailed knowledge of Act 2 Scene 5, where F & R have their biggest conflict of the play.
Several think that F calls R ‘Mary Shelley’ – it’s himself he calls this (otherwise it doesn’t make sense – think about it!)
A massively useful quote to indicate breakdown:
‘Found a better song to sing have you? No - you’ve found a different song, that’s all - and on your lips it’s shrill and hollow and tuneless.’
But most of you didn’t use it.
Go through Act 2 of the play and your notes on Act 2, and practice writing out accurate key quotes to show a change in F & R’s relationship (use Look, Cover, Write, Check). Then write as much detailed analysis as you can, explaining how Russell shows the change effectively.