Post by mrcaldicott on Mar 27, 2015 11:33:40 GMT
Generally, your best timed essays (in class) yet – well done. Most showed engagement with the poem and question.
What’s the ‘central idea’? Well, it’s okay to suggest that it’s ‘death’ but this is not actually the central idea I taught you. This is that it is not sweet and right to die for one’s country!!
Be aware of apostrophe errors: Owen’s comrades; the soldiers’ situation.
Don’t begin sentences with ‘This shows…’ or ‘It tells us that,’ BE SPECIFIC! E.g. ‘Owen’s clever use of contrast shows us the unpredictable deadliness of war…’
remember to suggest / infer / say ‘perhaps’ occasionally.
Owen’s background and beliefs are causing some confusion. He was patriotic, and believed the war was necessary – however he thought the conditions and manner of the soldiers’ deaths were ‘vile’ and ‘monstrous’.
Tone is how it sounds, Mood is how it feels.
You should mention the rhyme scheme – it’s an alternating ABAB pattern all the way through ‘Dulce’ Repetitious – like the drudgery and death of the war.
When you have to pick between three options, e.g. ‘death’ ‘conflict’ or ‘danger’ – the reason they want to discuss one is that it really focuses your analysis. Those that mentioned all three often had confused, jumbled analysis, or shied away from mentioning them during the essay.
The worst case scenario, that led to frequent failure, was that none of the keywords were mentioned. Why??
Top Seven errors:
1. Starting paragraphs with quotes
2. Writing ‘the war’, WW1 – or not even mentioning war!
3. Explaining lines but not evaluating them, or linking analysis to task
4. Not getting to verse 3 – the cancer quote is a must
5. ‘Uses present participle’ – no, participles (plural)
6. Not naming the technique in your analysis! E.g. ‘ecstasy’ and ‘drunk’ are examples of inversion or subversion, where Owen turns the traditional meanings or connotations of words on their head.
7. Not mentioning key terms of question at all
What’s the ‘central idea’? Well, it’s okay to suggest that it’s ‘death’ but this is not actually the central idea I taught you. This is that it is not sweet and right to die for one’s country!!
Be aware of apostrophe errors: Owen’s comrades; the soldiers’ situation.
Don’t begin sentences with ‘This shows…’ or ‘It tells us that,’ BE SPECIFIC! E.g. ‘Owen’s clever use of contrast shows us the unpredictable deadliness of war…’
remember to suggest / infer / say ‘perhaps’ occasionally.
Owen’s background and beliefs are causing some confusion. He was patriotic, and believed the war was necessary – however he thought the conditions and manner of the soldiers’ deaths were ‘vile’ and ‘monstrous’.
Tone is how it sounds, Mood is how it feels.
You should mention the rhyme scheme – it’s an alternating ABAB pattern all the way through ‘Dulce’ Repetitious – like the drudgery and death of the war.
When you have to pick between three options, e.g. ‘death’ ‘conflict’ or ‘danger’ – the reason they want to discuss one is that it really focuses your analysis. Those that mentioned all three often had confused, jumbled analysis, or shied away from mentioning them during the essay.
The worst case scenario, that led to frequent failure, was that none of the keywords were mentioned. Why??
Top Seven errors:
1. Starting paragraphs with quotes
2. Writing ‘the war’, WW1 – or not even mentioning war!
3. Explaining lines but not evaluating them, or linking analysis to task
4. Not getting to verse 3 – the cancer quote is a must
5. ‘Uses present participle’ – no, participles (plural)
6. Not naming the technique in your analysis! E.g. ‘ecstasy’ and ‘drunk’ are examples of inversion or subversion, where Owen turns the traditional meanings or connotations of words on their head.
7. Not mentioning key terms of question at all